Dierdre
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Post by Dierdre on Feb 3, 2011 19:38:36 GMT -5
I guess I need to post here to get feedback for my first rp... So yeah was it rubbish and after you realize it is, how can I improve it? (I know I am being negative, but nothing can ever be good in my eyes. If it can be improved it is not good.)
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Post by Bubba Anthony on Feb 3, 2011 19:49:50 GMT -5
I thought it was fine. All I suggest is putting your name beside your lines, as it makes it easier for me to read. I'm not a drunk redneck in real life, but I am a dumb blond haha. It seemed fine to me.
Kyle
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Post by Jay Omega on Feb 4, 2011 14:20:26 GMT -5
As a bit of a pessimist, I can understand your statement about improvement. I'm rarely happy with my own work; most of it is "satisfactory" in my eyes. But just because improvement is possible, doesn't mean it's not good.
As far as a first post goes, there was some good description, and entertainment value. Once you get your first match, I'm sure you'll slip right into a comfortable style that works for you. The only suggestion I have follows along with what Bubba said. Now, you don't necessarily have to put your name beside the spoken text, though it does make things a little easier if there are multiple characters appearing in your posts; but if that's the case, a colour code wouldn't be amiss.
For example; I once knew a guy who would list all the characters appearing in each post at the top of the post, with a colour chart so we'd know who was who when they were talking.
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